quand vous serez parti, je vivrai encore ([info]triptyque) wrote in [info]deleterius,
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This fic got 69 reviews. All of them are glowing praise. I think we must not be reading the same story.

Story Or Series Title: Tattoos and piercings
Fandom: Harry Potter
Culprit Author's Name black*angel

Full Name (plus titles if any): Ginny Weasley, Hot Topic postergirl
Full Species(es): Human/witch
Hair Color (include adjectives): Red "Blaise always called her little red. He loved her hair color. It was because of him that she did not dye her hair black."
Eye Color (include adjectives): I suppose it's brown
Unusual Markings/Colorations: "She went to the piercing parlor inside the mall and got her ears pierced four times on her left ear and six times on her right. She also got her belly button, nose, and tongue pierced." "On her lower back was tattoio of a black bar code and the numbers under it were her birthday" "She got her bridge pierced and the right side of her lip"
Special possessions : a charmed CD player, "her diamond stud nose ring, blue metallic tongue ring, and her black metallic belly button ring"

Annoying Origin: Arthur and Molly Weasley's daughter, who got a job in Hot Topic over the summer( even though there is no Hot Topic in England)
Annoying Connections To Canon Characters: Draco's love interest, Blaise Zabini's best friend, shares a dorm with both of them
Annoying Special Abilities:: Turns Harry into a rapist, Hermione into a clingy bitch and Draco into some kind of KeWl PuNk BoI.
Other Annoying Traits:: she has some kind of kEwLiEZ eating disorder
Please include a small sample of the worst of this story:



Ginny Weasley walked over to her full-length mirror. To say she went through some changes during the summer would be an understatement. In the begging of the summer she went to a muggle mall in London. While she was there she found a store called "Hot Topic". She went in and fell in love with the clothes. She had been what you would call a prep all her life but now she had found out what punk was.

She soon filled out an application to work there and got a job. With that job came a 30% discount on clothes and a 15% discount on leather items and body jewelry. She soon found out that everyone who worked there had at least three things pierced beside the six holes they had in their ears, Ginny decided she had to get caught up. She went to the piercing parlor inside the mall and got her ears pierced four times on her left ear and six times on her right. She also got her belly button, nose, and tongue pierced. Now she is anything but prep.





When they got to the train station she left with her bag and trunk as fast as she could and went through the barrier. She got into the first open compartment that she found and sat down now listening to old Good Charlotte. 20 minutes later the down opened and Draco Malfoy walked in. Except he didn't look the same. He was stretching out his left ear lobe and was wearing a black baggy sweat shirt and black baggy cargo shorts. She stared at him for minutes until he broke the silence.

"Red didn't your mother teach you it isn't polite to stare?" He asked her.

"Huh? What?" She asked while taking off her headphones.

"What were you listening to?" He asked her.

"Good Charlotte."

"Oh they are pretty good. Their old stuff or new?"

"Old their new stuff is too pop"

"Oh I know what you mean! They are just trying to get famous then hopefully they go back to punk"




*Flash Back:* Ginny was in the living room sketching gowns. She loved to design clothing. Harry came in and sat next to her. She didn't really notice because he had been at their house all summer. He was watching her draw and started rubbing her legs. Ginny became uncomfortable.

"Harry what are you doing," She asked him nervously.

"Shhhh, it's ok." He replied.

Then she started moving up her thigh. This made her even more uncomfortable then she already was. Ever since the Tom Riddle experience she has been uncomfortable with guys touching her, even if it is just a friendly arm around her shoulders.

"Harry, stop you are making me uncomfortable!"

"Ginny what's wrong? You know you like me"

"Yes I used to like you but know you are more of a brother."

"Well that's not good enough for me!"

Harry then started to try and kiss her. She was trying her best to keep him off but he was too strong. *Damn quidditch!* she thought. He was starting to take his top off when Ron came in.

"What the hell do you think you are doing??" He asked angrily.

"Ron, Ginny was trying to make a move on me. She was taking off my top and everything. I was telling her to stop." Harry replied trying to sound as innocent as possible.

Ron was actually stupid enough to believe Harry. Even though he saw it with his own eyes that Harry was on top.

"Ginny why would you do that?? I thought you cared about Hermione!"

"No! Ron I didn't Harry is lying!!" Ginny said on the brink of tears.

"Why would Harry try to make out with you? He is in love with Hermione."

"Please Ron believe me." She pleaded with him.

"You know Ginny, don't hang out with us anymore this summer!"

And they left. Ginny didn't run after them and try to explain herself. She knew it was useless. Ron trusted Harry 100%. And Ginny used to.

*End Flash Back.*






Dear Miss Weasley,

The sorting hat has sensed a change in your personality. It no longer thinks that Gryffindor is the right house for you. It has switched you into Slytherin. Hope this isn't inconvenient for you. When you told me what a young Mr. Potter did to you this summer I didn't think you would mind the change. Please owl me with you thoughts on this new change.

Yours Truly,

Albus Dumbledore.





"Great the Slytherin whore decides to join us," Harry said while staring coldly at Ginny

"Watch your mouth Potter, or you may have a new scar." Blaise threatened him.

"Like you could do anything to Harry. He is so strong and brave and he has been in so many more battles than you!" Hermione said while smiling at Harry.





"Oh you think its funny do ya? Well you better run!!" Draco yelled and got up ready to chase her. Ginny screamed and ran out into the common room. Blaise was in the shower so she couldn't hide behind him. Ginny ducked behind the couch but Draco picked her up and dropped her on the couch. Then he started tickling her without mercy. Ginny was laughing so hard she though she was going to piss her pants. Well skirt.

"Ahh!! No!! Please stop!" She managed to say between fits of laughter.





"Harry what the hell do you think you are doing? Take your fucking hands off of me!" Ginny yelled.

Harry smacked her across the face to shut her up. It worked.

"You told Zambini didn't you? You did you little whore!" Harry screamed at her.

"Yes ok Harry I did!" Ginny thought it would be best just to let him no the truth. Bad Idea!!

"Harry was repeatedly hitting her and slamming into the wall. "Why did you do that you filthy bitch?? Huh? Did you think he would help you? Ginny don't you know by now that no one cares about you? No one cares Ginny! Get that through your thick ugly head!" And with one last hit Harry left her. Ginny was bleeding she could feel it. She was no longer hungry so she walked slowly back to her common room. She wondered how bad she looked because she was crying so her makeup would be messed up and with blood flowing out of her. Jeeze I must look really bad! She thought to herself. She got to the portrait and mumble "Pennywise" When she walked in Blaise and Draco ran to her side.





Of course they went with her. They didn't want her to be alone at anytime. They found Snape and asked him Dumbledore's password. He didn't ask any questions once he saw Ginny. He quickly told them it was "Puddle of Mudd". They found the statue and said the password. Blaise helped her walk up the stairs. The knocked and Dumbledore told them they may enter.

"Oh Merlin! Ginny what happened?" Dumbledore asked worry in his voice.

"I had a little run in with the boy who lived and he ran me into the wall." Ginny told him.

Dumbledore had rage in his eyes but that quickly went away. He told the boys to never leave her out of their sight. He also said that she might want to sleep in Blaise's room because he knew how close they were. He would take care of Harry Later.




Dumbledore stood up and told the six kids to go into his office, and he would meet them there. They walked in silence; Ginny was in between Draco and Blaise trying to keep them from attacking Harry. Hermione was trying to find a counter curse in one of her pocket sized books she always carries around, and Harry was absolutely fuming. His face was bright red and every now and then he would punch the wall. Once or twice he broke his hand but fixed it with a spell. Ron was being very, very quite. Taking in what just happened; Harry almost hit is sister. In his mind he remembered the times that Bill would hit his girl friends and then it didn't seem so weird. Plus Ginny had tried to split Harry and Hermione up.


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[info]andhowever

July 12 2003, 13:33:46 UTC 8 years ago

This. Is. Not. Happening.
Oh, the humanity!
--Amy

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[info]maniacalmuse

July 12 2003, 16:10:42 UTC 8 years ago

Oh. That DOES it.

We won't talk about the rampant OOCness, the gratuitous making Harry EEEEEEEBIL just because the bint of an author decides that she likes Draco better... but...

YE GODS!!! WHAT THE HELL HAVE YOU DONE TO MY POOR SLYTHERINS?!?! >:O>:O>:O

And the fucking around with eating disorders and cutting. NO. NO.

*runs at author screaming, sword in hand*

[info]affabletoaster

July 14 2003, 17:28:42 UTC 8 years ago

A couple years ago, I read a good Ginny depression fic. Of course, I wrote a Mary Sue about the same time, so maybe it wasn't as good as I thought. *cringe*

[info]elizaveta

July 12 2003, 16:14:01 UTC 8 years ago

Where the hell does Harry-as-rapist come from? Where? Let's forget that he's never physically laid a hand on anyone except Malfoy; let's forget that the only time he's ever liked someone he was so shy and awkward around her that he couldn't even talk to her coherently, much less start violating her personal space without encouragement; let's forget besides the oh! I am so angsty! phase he went through in OotP he's generally a good, respectful kid; what the hell, let's forget everything that ever happened in the books! This is the second Harry-tries-to-rape-Ginny fic I've read; it disgusts me.
And why do Sues always bring their headphones with them on the train, anyway? Muggle gadgets don't work at Hogwarts*, so wouldn't it be a waste to take your CDs and CD player with you if you could only use them on the train?
How do you think Molly felt about Ginny's new look if she can't stand Bill's hair and earring?
*If you've read the books, which I would be convinced that this author hadn't except that she knows the name Blaise Zabini, and that's not in the movie... At least, that's who I assume "Zambini" is...

[info]ccruffles

July 13 2003, 17:41:21 UTC 8 years ago

*If you've read the books, which I would be convinced that this author hadn't except that she knows the name Blaise Zabini, and that's not in the movie... At least, that's who I assume "Zambini" is...

Let's say she hasn't read the book...just talked to someone who did once and she picked up the name so it would look like she'd read the book.

Of course that's making the author out to have some kind of devious mind...forget what I said before (:

[info]apocalypsos

July 12 2003, 16:48:06 UTC 8 years ago

*happy sigh*

Vented. Deleted. Feel infinitely better now.

I'd feel better if this fic had never come into fruition, but still.

Anonymous

July 12 2003, 18:45:13 UTC 8 years ago

Poor Ginny. Poor Harry.

I'd really rather read about the most egregious Tatiana Katyana Morning-Glory Riddle-Black than see poor Ginny taken so grossly OOC and used as an author self-insert.

I love the *canon* Harry and Ginny far too much. Ginny in OOtP was pretty darn cool in her own right, why make her into Miss Hot Topic 1995? (What year did Hot Topic start business, anyway? I'm an old fart so I'm not up on these things, but I thought it was later than 1995.)

Rapist!Harry is too egregious to dignify with a comment, but I want to point out a few things about Gratuitous Body Piercing in the HP world: One, McGonagall is a *very* strict Head of House and I'm sure she'd not permit her students to wear piercings. Remember in GoF how she made Parvati take out her gaudy butterfly hair clip? If she won't permit glittery hair clips, imagine what McGonagall would say about piercings!

Second, Molly, aka The Boss of the Burrow. When Molly says "Jump," all other Weasleys say, "Yes ma'am! How high?" Molly would say to a pierced Ginny, "You are NOT setting foot across my threshold until you take every last one of those things OUT!" I'm sure if Bill were still living at home he'd not be allowed his long hair and earring. I sincerely doubt that Molly would let Ginny get away with a pierced "palate" (ouch).

Clarimonde

[info]prinsessafrog

July 12 2003, 18:52:57 UTC 8 years ago

"She got out of the shower and pulled on the out fit she left out last night. A black tank top that she got when she saw "Rent" over the summer with Raven. It had "Rent" on it in white block letters.

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!! Anything but RENT!! *cries*

Jonathan Larson is gouging out his eyes from the grave, I'm sure.

[info]fickwalker

July 17 2003, 00:05:57 UTC 8 years ago

No, No, No, No, No, No!!! Not RENT. Dear God, I will personally fly to the author's hometown and gladly disembowel them for that one ...




G
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[info]livviebway

8 years ago

[info]zarla

July 12 2003, 20:50:13 UTC 8 years ago

It hurts so bad. It's hilarious, but it still hurts so bad.

Anonymous

July 12 2003, 23:24:06 UTC 8 years ago

This isn't happening.

Unfortunately, it is. People are raping Harry Potter ( literally ), people who have no business even using a keyboard.

I mean, the humanity! Geesh! Why don't they just write their own original crap.

-Reader

[info]melanthamoree

July 13 2003, 06:07:29 UTC 8 years ago

Re: This isn't happening.

Because they're not creative enough to write their own stuff. :P

Anonymous

8 years ago

Anonymous

July 13 2003, 14:39:23 UTC 8 years ago

OMG!!!

THIS IS A FUCKIN FANFIC!!!!!!!!!!!! SHE CAN WRITE WHATEVER THE FUCK SHE WANTS AND IF YOU DON'T LIKE IT THEN WHAT THE FUCK ARE YOU DOING READING IT!!!! GOD IT'S PEOPLE LIKE YOU WHO REALLY PISS ME OFF. THERE ARE PEOPLE WHO ENJOY THE STORY AND IF THEY DO THAT'S GREAT BUT WHAT THE FUCK DO YOU THINK YOU'RE DOING GOING AROUND TRASHING IT. INCASE YOU DIDN'T NOTICE....MORE PEOPLE HAPPEN TO LIKE THE STORY THAN HATE IT...SO FUCK OFF!!!

thank you and have a great fuckin day......

[info]ccruffles

July 13 2003, 17:59:49 UTC 8 years ago

Re: OMG!!!

MORE PEOPLE HAPPEN TO LIKE THE STORY THAN HATE IT

Did you conduct a poll of everyone in the whole world? This sentence proves nothing. A lot of people read stories and decline to leave a review, especially if it's as appalling as this.

IF YOU DON'T LIKE IT THEN WHAT THE FUCK ARE YOU DOING READING IT!!!!

You seem to have missed the entire point of our community...this is what we do. We read stories, identify Mary Sues (or main character Sues as this one is - when it strays so far from canon) and then we analyse it.

We are very protective of our respective fandoms and hate to see them so thoroughly ripped apart by authors that do not put time and effort into making their stories vaguely realistic, or at any rate fully explaining why a character has changed so much as to no longer represent the one they are in the books.

[info]gj_fate

8 years ago

[info]vassilissa

July 14 2003, 05:26:04 UTC 8 years ago

I've been lurking on this community, and I read the story on this disrec. I like bad fanfic. It's like potato chips, oily and devoid of nutrition but fun.

Then I read the reviews. Um (this is addressed to the people who wrote the rather vicious reviews on her review page, and linked back to this thread) that's just mean. If your aim's to improve her writing, or to teach her that Mary Sues are not good, how does calling her a fuckwit help? Or if you're just flaming a teenager on her first, I'll agree, very teenaged story, why?

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[info]sam_chan

July 14 2003, 12:05:25 UTC 8 years ago

In his mind he remembered the times that Bill would hit his girl friends and then it didn't seem so weird.

Even if this weren't one of the worst fanfics -- not just Mary Sue fics, but fanfics in general -- that I've ever read, even if the whole thing were brilliant up to this point, I cannot forgive making Bill Weasley into the mean, abusive boyfriend. Like assassinating the characters of Ginny, Harry, Hermione, Ron, Draco and Dumbledore (and probably the entirety of Hogwarts, England and the Universe by the time the story is over) wasn't enough. She had to toss in a one-line throwaway that destroys Bill's character, too.

Oh, and having the password to the Slytherin common room be the name of a popular Muggle band is one thing (it's been done before), but the password to DUMBLEDORE'S OFFICE being "Puddle of Mudd"? That just TEARS IT.

There are no words strong enough to describe the brutal canon rape going on here. I'm just stunned.

I won't even go into the whole "Hot Topic = TEH PUNK" philosophy at work here. It's too painful to discuss.

Anonymous

July 15 2003, 18:07:43 UTC 8 years ago

how can you say that?

how can you deffend this person....she obviously(sp?) has no respect for what harry potter really is...*shakes head* people these days...

[info]sorion

July 16 2003, 01:36:37 UTC 8 years ago

Oh, well...

Guess it's kind of amusing... in a strange, nauseating way... -_-'
And I will simply refuse to read any further than the first two paragraphs.

But I do believe I've seen worse... (when I don't get past the first paragraph *g* )

Anonymous

July 16 2003, 03:16:50 UTC 8 years ago

The idea behind a review is to provide feedback for a story, so that an author may hope to improve on his or her work. Flames are not constructive in any way, shape, or form, and are more likely to hinder an author's ability to develop. By choosing to ignore this simple guideline and instead bashing an author who at the very least put in the effort and time to write an entire story, certain reviewers here have shown a definite lack of consideration and maturity.

Congratulations, you've managed to catch and hold the attention of hundreds of hard-working authors who both love and respect the Harry Potter book series. For once, we (at a certain yahoo group) are united in something. Complete and total disgust at the total lack of respect shown by certain people here.

Now scurry off and write your scathing reviews to this post, I'm sure they will be full of crude remarks and amusing anecdotes. I'd expect nothing less.

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Anonymous

July 16 2003, 06:44:50 UTC 8 years ago

im speechless.. is it even a hp related fic? harry is totally OOC, draco's parents would never allow him follow muggle culture, much less listen to pop/punk songs or whatever. and ginny's real mother would absolutely scream with the amount of piercings she has, remember Bill and his earring? i cant bear to read beyond chapter 1. however, your review is not very.. polite. it would be more constructive and the writer might be willing to take your comments into account w/o all the.. cursing.

[info]storm_maven

July 16 2003, 17:01:38 UTC 8 years ago

That is not a Harry Potter fic. That fic came from an unknown series called Henry Pooter. Can't you tell? It's an alternate universe where the main character, Henry, is a woman-beating-bastard who is dating this wuss-bitch (Whore-minione) for a girlfriend who just drools over him 24/7. The main woman character (Ginny "Lawanda") is just a lonely girl trying to get attention by going into Ding-a-ling Alley to get a job at an imaginary mall and becomes goth.

If I can't get through the first chapter it's really, really bad.

Anonymous

July 17 2003, 12:15:22 UTC 8 years ago

haha!!

that was absoulutly hillarious...but sounds abaout tru. this person ruined what we know as harry potter and changed it to some PuNkIe crap. I have nothing againts punks but...ginny....draco... OMG it's juss sick!

[info]retardedrice

July 16 2003, 19:32:32 UTC 8 years ago

I can't believe I'm saying this but I actually prefer the usual Mary Sues with the purple eyes and psychic powers to the Hot Topic-frequenting Ginny.

[info]fickwalker

July 17 2003, 00:00:21 UTC 8 years ago

Sadly, I think I may be a member of that group they're talking about. I haven't been paying attention in the last couple of days but I know that this has been a fairly high discussion topic.



G
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Anonymous

July 20 2003, 23:52:00 UTC 8 years ago

That got GOOD reviews? Please tell me that was a joke.

Okay, she got pierced 476923 times and all of a sudden she's not prep? She works at Hot Topic and finds out what punk is? Please.

This is disgusting. Even NLPDFC is better than this. Ew. Just... ew.

[info]lily_blossoms

July 25 2003, 02:29:47 UTC 8 years ago

Awww. A society just to talk about us deletrius-kins? Awwww.

How cute. May I have a link sweetheart?

~Jen

P.S. Honey, you're so kind. Could I have your name too?

[info]ballyharnon

October 5 2003, 00:23:25 UTC 8 years ago

Heh. You know, when I was an ickle punk grrl, I had a job at Hot Topic, loathe as I am to admit it. You actually get a 40% discount on everything. But that's just splitting hairs.

Anonymous

March 21 2004, 20:32:05 UTC 8 years ago

Blegh!

Make me gag why dont you? This story is horrible, if you can even call it a story. I have read and written a lot of fanfic, and this just plain old sucks. and this is comming from a person who never cusses.

[info]leechwife_19

April 9 2004, 19:45:58 UTC 8 years ago

the story is nowhere to be found.

too bad, i could use a laugh right now...

Anonymous

August 20 2004, 01:10:56 UTC 7 years ago

She had been what you would call a prep all her life but now she had found out what punk was.

Oh no oh no oh no. Sid Vicious is ROLLING in his grave!
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